I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 8 and in 2021 I will be a year 9. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
For reading I have been reading Science on Ice. And one of tasks I decide to make a short clip with bite-able, about what I have been reading. It gives some detail of whats in the story.
I was very pleased to see that you have posted a reading blog this week. This Test you have been reading looks like a really interesting read. You have summarised some of the facts from the text which provides some insight for your reader. I suggest that you always use your own words when summarising rather than inserting little snippets of text from the article. The "we' and 'I' in your animation suggest that you were there. Please proofread to make sure that punctuation and sentences are correct. Keep up the great work Chloe.
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Hi Chloe
ReplyDeleteI was very pleased to see that you have posted a reading blog this week. This Test you have been reading looks like a really interesting read. You have summarised some of the facts from the text which provides some insight for your reader. I suggest that you always use your own words when summarising rather than inserting little snippets of text from the article. The "we' and 'I' in your animation suggest that you were there. Please proofread to make sure that punctuation and sentences are correct. Keep up the great work Chloe.