I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 8 and in 2021 I will be a year 9. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
I really enjoyed reading through your wolf DLO, you have put a lot of effort and care into creating it. You have grouped your ideas and information under relevant headings and used a wide range of specific and technical language which is essential in a high quality piece of work like this. If you were to convert your slides into a piece of writing you would have an excellent structure and plan to base a great piece of explanation writing on. This is the type of structure that you can carry over to your fantasy/narrative writing. Keep up the great work Chloe and use what you already know how to do to help you with your next steps.
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I really enjoyed reading through your wolf DLO, you have put a lot of effort and care into creating it. You have grouped your ideas and information under relevant headings and used a wide range of specific and technical language which is essential in a high quality piece of work like this. If you were to convert your slides into a piece of writing you would have an excellent structure and plan to base a great piece of explanation writing on. This is the type of structure that you can carry over to your fantasy/narrative writing. Keep up the great work Chloe and use what you already know how to do to help you with your next steps.
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